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A Palm Reader in New Orleans by ~thenakedlunch:iconthenakedlunch:





They say the beignets at Café Du Monde
   are best at 9 a.m., so here I sit.
A cigarette-brushed face of a woman sends
   a glance my way, so I check my watch as an
   excuse to break that moment of discomfort.
Like hell I had anywhere to be.
I tucked my paper under my arm
   and left my seat short of the table.

I walked down to the quarter and
   sat next to a painter.
His who-do-you-think-you-are eyes
   put me in my place, so I left.

I sat on the sidewalk next to a palm
   reader's table.
"Aye boi, yewsa ever getcha pam read?"
A casually curved smiled played predecessor
   to a "No ma'am, can't say I have".
Her eyes craved I come forward, so I did.
   "Eets a thurdy dolla".
Since when did money making cloak
   itself in the cunning muse of curiosity?

I sat back down on the sidewalk, pulled
  out my notebook and pretended
  not to notice when people would walk by
  as if I am that painter and my brush is my
  rhetoric.
      I wonder if anyone noticed I was simply scribbling.

"Aye yea boi, yeesa really tank the answers yewsa seek
    are in that bouk 'ight there."
She let out of a bellowing laugh that shook all of her
   gaudy jewelry and beads.
"Ees that wascha really are worried 'bout?
Come ah here boi"
She leaned over and whispered in my ear,
   finally dropping her accent and said:

"La mort sourit sur vous"
©2004-2009 ~thenakedlunch
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Have you ever awoken to a morning in which it was a bit cold, so you felt tempted to get a jacket, but then you consider it will probably get warmer later and the jacket would lose its utility and become mere luggage.
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this is what i have been waiting for from you.
great dialogue and dialect.
awesome french at the end.
i love your description of checking your watch for comfort, not real function.

spectacular piece....i'm enthralled.

--
Art is life worked with: is life
wheedled, or whelmed:
assessed:
clandestine, but evoked
-“Young Heroes” by Gwendolyn Brooks
at least i know one person will be able to understand the line at the end. :P

--
The early bird catches the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese.
it
is
beautifully tragic.
:faint:

:drool:

:)

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Art is life worked with: is life
wheedled, or whelmed:
assessed:
clandestine, but evoked
-“Young Heroes” by Gwendolyn Brooks
that was beautiful. if beautiful really is the right word. it was captivating, and everything that is human nature. its easy to relate to, and complex in an understandable way- like theres more to it. i love this.
it's great! urm..'awesome french' at the end, oh my!
I have to agree with ~blindme, I went to say that it was beautiful but don't quite feel that it is the right word to describe it. I also think it's captivating, for all the same reasons.

I love the way there was so much concealed beneath the guise of simple actions, and the authenticity of the terrible accent the palm reader was using.

I wasn't entirely sure about the tenth stanza though. "She let out of a bellowing laugh that shook all of her / gaudy jewelry and beads." It seemed a bit awkward, as though there shouldv'e been a smoother transition in this stanza. Also should jewelry not be jewellery, unless that's an Americanised version of the spelling =/

I'm really loving the French at the end, mine isn't too crash hot, but "death smiles on you" if I'm not mistaken?

I love it though, awesome job.
'enthralled'. my girlfriend is such a drama queen. tell her she is such a geek. It was a very inspiring poem. you have such a different style. It is refreshing to read something different on DA.
ah, yet lest we not overlook the spelling king.

--
The early bird catches the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese.
thank you for the comment and the devwatch.

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The early bird catches the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese.

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